May 15 2009

Review Analysis

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http://www.seacoastonline.com/articles/20090515-ENTERTAIN-90515033?nocache=1

http://www.nypost.com/seven/05152009/entertainment/movies/holy_pope_opera__169307.htm?page=0

http://www.combustiblecelluloid.com/2009/angelsdemons.shtml

http://www.nj.com/entertainment/tv/index.ssf/2009/05/review_angels_demons_a_silly_r.html

http://www.dc50tv.com/entertainment/movies/wdcw-waffle-reviews-angelsanddemons,0,3457949.htmlstory

When it comes down to it, even the good reviews find something bad to say about Angels and Demons. Most all the reviews slash the script, saying that it does not get to all the most interesting point that the book has. They criticize the fact that the movie doesn’t highlight the battle between science and religion along with the other drama and history in the book. Yet for a movie to be good you cannot input every small detail in the movie that you would find in the book; the movie would be days long. 

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May 15 2009

Persuasive Essay- May 8th

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The SAT (stupid ass test)

 

For juniors in high school it comes around every year some time. That one Friday night when you don’t allow yourself to leave your house, you eat a good dinner, and get into bed at an hour earlier than usual. All in preparation for the dreaded Saturday morning when you have to wake in the same hour as a weekday, eat a good breakfast and mentally prepare yourself for endless hours of focus.  The SAT. Hour upon hour of frantic focus trying to get to every question possible, stressed about whether you’re answering correctly. The test, which has hung over your head throughout high school, comes to an end and you’re allowed to leave the school, brain dead. Usually a sense of relief comes that it is completed, but then the waiting game starts. Months pass and all you can do is hope and pray for that impossible perfect score.

 

The SAT is not an effective or fair way to judge someone’s qualifications for college admission. To place so much stress on one single test causes differences in how students could potentially perform. The obvious argument is that some people do not test as well as others. And in the case of the SAT your family’s financial status could also play a role in how well you take the test. The SAT is a skills test versus and knowledge test such as the ACT; therefore, if you practice and learn how to take the test you will do better. As Dean of College Admissions at the University of Chicago stated, “The College Board would rather not tell us that scores, in the aggregate, correspond to income of parents” (O’Neill). Surveys taken from cities throughout Ohio have shown that there is an obvious relation, “Officials at Baldwin-Wallace College say the correlation between test scores and income is one of the reasons they want to make the SAT and ACT optional for enrollment” (Downey). Who is accepted on college campuses also is impacted by who scores well on the test.

 

While colleges’ goals are to diversify their campuses as much as possible, using a test favoring people of similar income only breeds campuses of ultimately similar people. As associate press writer of the University of California said, “One of the criticisms leveled against the SAT is that it is culturally biased and unfair to disadvantaged students. Admissions diversity has been an issue at UC since 1995, when regents voted to drop affirmative action. Numbers of black and Hispanic students have fallen at top campuses since then” (Locke). How much money your parents are making should have no influence on your ability to get into the college you want. Sarah Rimer from the New York Time wrote that, “Some argue that it is really a marketing tool, intended to encourage students to take the test more often. Others say that, contrary to the College Board’s goal, the policy will aggravate the testing frenzy and add yet another layer of stress and complexity to applying to college” (Rimer). No matter your parents’ financial situation you should be able to work your hardest and achieve all that you are capable of.

 

To begin to judge a student and their qualifications off of a single test is unfair when we are so much more than a test. As colleges say, they are looking for the well-rounded student, someone involved in many activities. As the New York Times even states, “The president of the University of California is proposing an end to the use of SAT’s as a requirement for admission to the state university system he oversees, one of the largest and most prestigious” (Schemo). To have the president of such a huge institution state that he is thinking about terminating use of SAT’s as a mark of eligibility for incoming college students is very significant for the futures possibility. The UC (University of California) system is one of the most prestigious in the United States and were they to change something so big, it would have a great influence in other colleges and universities throughout the country.

 

Of course there will always be the orthodox SAT believers, and on top of all of those people is the head of College Board, Gaston Caperton. Caperton said, “To drop the SAT would be like deciding you’re going to drop grades” (Locke). Caperton argues that the SAT is the only was to have a ‘national yardstick’ for keeping everyone on the same scale. Caperton states, “You do everything you can to help [students] learn as fast as they can” (Schemo). This basically tells me that Caperton is not necessarily interested in how well the student comprehends everything as long as they seem like they know how to test and only look good on the surface.  So while a ‘national yardstick’ is something necessary for ranking students, the SAT is not an accurate measurement for aptitude. It is more like a test for determining how well off your family stands. 

 

Colleges need to play more attention to the student’s grades and the courses they took. Although college admission staffs state that they look at you and everything you offer, it is frustrating to hear so much emphasis being placed on standardized testing scores. This is what makes hearing the heads of huge institutions, such as Chicago or California, put down the SAT is so refreshing. Whatever the replacement be for the mammoth SAT, it should come sooner rather than later. Diversifying and creating a fair admissions marker for colleges throughout the world will start with changing the SAT, a necessary change for the near future and now.

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Apr 15 2009

Pink Floyd- Sentence Combining

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1. As the sky begins to cloud and dusk begins to fall the sky becomes reddened as a typical Midwestern sunset.

2. Coming to hear Pink Floyd, even the pouring rain cannot stop the thousands of fans from flocking into Cincinnati’s River-front Coliseum.

3. Thousands decked in faded blue jeans, and tie-dyed T-shirts are all energized and ready for the concert; still three hours off.

4. Expensive shirts indicate the newcomers to the rock scene, their awkwardness highlighted by their actions.

5. Loners weave aimlessly searching for their place among the crowd.

6. Couples are found clinging to each other in remote corners and near fountains.

7. Striding confidently through the crown in large groups the cops sweep their eyes over the area searching for trouble.

8. Where the crowds are, the hawkers are, trying to unload their cheap merchandise to hyped up people.

9. Numbers grow and the area leading up to the auditorium is filled with swarms of roamers, couples, and cops all confusedly wander the concrete.

10. Final minutes before the show begins doors open and tired, sweaty fans pour in and peace can no longer be contained.

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Apr 10 2009

Definition Essay- April 10th

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Youth’s Ignorance

 

Feeling his eyes sear into the back of my head during Chemistry was unbearable; I could not turn around for fear that he would be looking back directly at me. Feelings of insecurity overwhelmed me, as if all of a sudden I had been broken down into some pathetic being.  These emotions I had not felt for the longest time because I was always so happy being with him. Relationships are something to learn and grow from. You cannot allow yourself to get so caught up in the moment that that one person you are connected to becomes your entire life. It is important to be your own person and never compromise yourself for someone. I know that I’m worth more than anything I ever got out of my past relationship with Jake.

 

Having your world flipped upside down because a relationship has been ripped away from you is like the sudden shock of drug withdrawal. Being so caught up in one single person and devoting all your spare time to them takes your own personal life away. I remember after everything had ended with Jake, sitting home after school, flipping through the horrible daytime soaps on TV, and wondering what I had done with my time for the past six months.  Where all my friends had gone? What had been going on with my family? I had let my life become so consumed with this stupid boy that my grades suffered, my relationship with my parents was a constant struggle, and I had completely shut off any hang time with my friends.

 

Yet Jake helped me put things into perspective. On many occasions we would talk about where everything was going where we would be in a few months and what the point was of being in a relationship. “I like you so much, but it’s not like I’m going to marry you” was something he said to me before we had even started dating. When I was with Jake we could find excitement out of the most ordinary things, even lazily lying around his living room laughter would fill the room and an endless smile would be on my face. Unfortunately smiles eventually faded and emotions started to shift and as we had talked about before: the reality of high school relationships: they eventually end. 

 

How one looks at a situation can be very different depending on who you are. If someone believes that a relationship in high school can last through everything and that something so young in life can translate into forever, then they have a very optimistic view on life. One day as I passed by a couple in the science hall between classes, the girl clinging to her boyfriend, I heard “I love you” effortlessly roll off her tongue, making me cringe. To just toss something like that around and use such a big word as fillers for a simple “goodbye” or “see ya later” is ridiculous. That is just part of the maturity issue people in high school face. ?Statistics-On-Teenage-Relationships&id=305753 Those few cases where people would stand up and testify that they have a relationship that has lasted from high school and they are still happily married so many years later… well good for them. Love is something that people find at various points in their lives, and most are incapable of knowing truly what they are feeling as hormonal teenagers—so we ignorantly label it love. 

 

Relationships help to define who you are, who you want to be. Those whom you spend your time with are extremely influential to your personality, just as your family is to you growing up. This highlights the importance in finding someone who pushes you and helps to make you the best you can be. Something I know about myself is that I am extremely competitive and this definitely carries into my current relationship. As elbows fly fighting for placement in a cross-country race, I also show this part of me in relationships.  We can always move on, go to bigger better things, learn and not make the same mistakes. When you lose a race, all light-headed, red in the face, and mad you didn’t kick harder at the end, you get up push yourself to prepare for the next one.

 

 

 

 

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Mar 11 2009

Personal Essay– March 6th

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I had a very memorable eating experience with my best friend Monteen. One morning I went to Seattle’s Chinatown and had dim sum with Monteen’s family. Being with a Chinese family, introduced me to foods that I would not otherwise have ordered or even thought of trying. A prime example of this was the chicken feet. Yes, chicken feet. As the server came around, Monteen’s mom uttered something in her quick Chinese tongue, and the next thing I knew there was a bowl of hot steaming, gnarled chicken feet placed right in front of me. I remember Monteen’s laughter towards my reaction: “I’m going to eat chicken feet?” I had no idea that you could eat them, or even how to go about it.

Exposure to foods out of my comfort zone helps make me the person I am today. My willingness to try new things has greatly been impacted by the culture shock I experienced at a younger age. That taste bud awakening is something I seek out frequently. I find it hilarious when going out to eat with friend and having all the slightly different foods being tossed onto my plate. This happened almost every time our cross-country team went to Spiro’s for our weekly pre-race day dinner. Looking away from my plate for a few seconds, trying to hold a conversation with the person shouting a few seats down from me, I turn back to see every black olive, tomato slice, cucumber slice, and hot pepperoncini peppers from five other salads all on my plate. Being surrounded by picky eaters highlighted my willingness to eat just about anything.

I especially loved when this same pawning off of ‘gross’ foods happened on a school trip to France. Monteen and I were exactly the opposite of the picky eaters on the trip: the ones who would push everything around on their plate till it looked like something had been eaten. Being in a European country was an awesome way to try new foods because anywhere we went there was some strange new thing to try. That being the fact, it was so disgusting to me to see some of my peers eating McDonalds in France. The pungent fois gras, tough escargot, and gooey frog legs were definitely some of the strangest things I ate on that trip, but were far better than eating some greasy cheeseburger I could eat at home any other day. Limiting yourself to the same old experiences makes you less dynamic because it confines to your norm. You pass up the opportunity to broaden your horizon.  Eating everyone’s unwanted new cuisine was never anything that bugged me because it meant that I was saving money and not ever going hungry.

The foods I have tried with Monteen’s family are so extremely different in comparison to what my family eats. For example, my family snacks on pickled herring and crackers. And, to Monteen that is very different and extremely gross. What I learned was that depending on what part of the world your family comes from, there can be differences in how your family eats. Monteen’s family hails from China where eating chicken feet is a special treat. My family hails from Scandinavian origins where pickled herring is a common food. While cultural backgrounds may determine preferences in our lives today we have been exposed to many various cultures. This has made both Monteen and I more open to trying new things, where in other parts of the world they don’t have the opportunity to experience multicultural experiences. For these reasons I’m very lucky to have grown up and gone through school with such diversity.

 

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Mar 06 2009

Rant Away

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  1. What is a rant according to the author and why does the baseball example qualify? When someone goes on and on about something they are passionate about. The baseball example if a good example because he rants about how it is ridiculous that Derek Jeter gets so much more praise over another player who should probably get as much or more praise. Also in the baseball example he talks about how someone went off yelling and cursing for an entire straight hour- that’s a rant.
  2. How has the rant changed in the age of the Web? They talk about how bad writing gets published on a certain site and there that story goes to die off. It seems like the more we use the web the more we lose touch because it is more difficult to keep up with everything and monitor everything that ever gets posted.
  3. Does this essay of definition look at negation, categorization, history, analysis, comparison, examples, results, or causes? This essay definitely uses the examples and history parts of a definitive essay. All the examples that the author uses are good in proving his point.
  4. Quote from the article in a blog post to note which elements of the definition essay the author focuses on?  ”A good rant, like this one, expresses a real passion, and it is often a passion that has been enflamed by a feeling of powerlessness. If the subway ranter had been able to “take a free shot [at the] gut” of the nail-clipping businessman (whose “nail shrapnel is flying every which way”), there would have been no need for the rant in the first place.” After providing good instances of when people were ranting the author does a good job of explaining the feelings behind that rant, and why people do so.
  5. Are rants bad?  Should we indulge in them for no other reason then catharsis or expression? Or is the world already too mean? Rants are not a bad thing. Sometimes they are what they take to prove a point or get needed attention. I could see how sometimes rants can be bad when people begin to get overly touchy about small things. 

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Feb 11 2009

Stop me

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The author hooks their audience by starting out with an anecdote. This reflection of his grandmother and the stories she shared with her family around the dinner table makes it easy for the reader to relate because we all (hopefully) have images in our heads of family dinners and the random stories that went around. The following provides humor to a usually dry subject, and is part of the reason the hook is effective: “One morning my grandmother and her colleagues arrived at the office to discover that someone had chiseled the silver dollar right out of the floor.” Even though I thought this piece was boring there are many good parts of the authors work. “I was raised on Depression stories” is a way of relating the authors experience of his dinner table as a kid to what it is today. Talking about the hardships that our generation also faces like that of the grandmother. “I fell in love with Marie Haggerty, a Massachusetts housemaid who talked about how, when her employer left a $5 bill on the floor, ‘my face burnt like fire, for I knowed I was gettin’ tested.’” This paints the image of the hardship people faced during the Great Depression and how everyone was struggling to make it though. Showing this in a story was much more interesting than just saying ‘people were poor during these times.” The author goes on to speak about how things have come full circle and how we need to once again “to imagine a future that is meaningful in the face of difficult circumstances. Listening to each other’s stories may grant us a sense of common purpose that money can’t buy.” This conclusion is very effective because it relates it again to the future and our lives. 

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Feb 06 2009

Showing sentences

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1. The hurricane was pretty cool. –> It was a good feeling to be sitting in the comfort of my warm living room, hearing the extreme rushing of wind and water fly outside my shuddering walls.

2. The whole class was bored. –> The monotone of the teacher’s lecture droned on as each student was caught up in their daydreams of the coming lunch, a sports game after school, or the attractive person of opposite sex sitting across the room.

3. I drove into a clown on the road. –> Highway hypnosis was setting in as each yellow dash passed in a more continuous pattern, until a loud thud hit my windshield and a sudden smudging of face paint was everywhere- red nose no longer present.

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Feb 04 2009

Tomorrow will be a better day

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  1. How does Rittenberg hook the reader? What’s happening? Rittenberg hooks the reader by using things that any age group would relate to. The tone presented by his dad’s point of view probably draws in most people of his dad’s age group, and then kids his and my age relate to that also because they have been in the same situation with their parent.
  2. What specifics does Rittenberg use to emphasize how older generations saw horrible things in their lifetimes? The use of big historical events such as the World Wars and big heath epidemics were examples of the ‘horrible’ things the older generations saw in their lifetimes.
  3. How does Rittenberg use specifics to demonstrate his hopefulness? Great hopefulness comes across in Rittenberg’s writing he starts to talk about all great things that came out of those same older generations. In the same paragraph that speaks about the ‘horrible things’ he transitions into the great feats that those same generations accomplished: “the end of two world wars, the polio vaccine, passage of the civil rights laws.”
  4. How does Rittenberg use the title to make his point? Through all the generations of his family he speaks of the accomplishments of each and how far each has progressed. ‘Tomorrow will be a better day’ is just showing that this trend will continue. And even though his dad freaks about the changes Rittenberg knows that these things are for the better that new and bigger things are to be accomplished.

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Feb 04 2009

This I believe

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It was very ironic to hear at the end of the read essay that the woman had drafter her essay on the computer. Everything she was saying was how she preferred the traditional lifestyle to the new digital movement. Finding something that you are truly passionate about is so important to how effective in how good your writing is going to be. This is something very important to me when I write because I have an extremely hard time finding things to write about when there’s no passion behind the topic. The writer in this case seems to be very passionate about her lifestyle and how she has changed to be the person she is today. Language that the writer used was also a big part of making the writing so powerful. The comparisons between her lifestyle in New York to the country is very important to providing the reader with visuals of everything. I also really like how she splits up everything she talks about, each paragraph isn’t talking about too much and overwhelming the reader with information. Her piece is very simple, yet still very descriptive in all her uses of similes and metaphors or in the story that she builds.

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